Rethinking

[mdlbear]

Took the five-mile loop by Los Gatos Creek today. No blisters to show for it either. So Yay! I think I used the time pretty well.

See, I've had this melody stuck in my head for a couple of years now. Probably cobbled together from stolen bits, they all are, but I've made it mine by now. It's basically a march, and has (to my mind at least) a sort of noble, high-fantasy feel to it. It attached itself to Quiet Victories.

Never mind that it blows my original 3/4 scansion to smithereens. That's where it seems to want to be.

Forget heroic fantasy
Those aren't the tales I need to hear
Tell me the tale you never told
Of quiet victory over fear

Still very fragmentary; that's all I have that's reasonably solid at the moment.

Comments

[aerowolf.livejournal.com]

mmm... I like it.

I'm assuming it's pronounced "vict'ry" in the last line, at least at this stage of creative coalescence? (it seems to be the only way I can make it scan to a 2/4 march beat.)

What are the tales that you want to tell?

[mdlbear]

I think the march is more like 2/4, making it 6/8 under the covers; the "o" is very understressed, but it's there.

I only have two verses completely done out of four or five; and those are still unstable and only came together after I wrote this post.

It's all about women's lives; the stable verses are about breast cancer and motherhood.

More as it comes to me; it'll probably take at least the rest of the week.

[mdlbear]

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[bookwyrm172006.livejournal.com]

Pretty. I like it. Can't wait to hear.

[mdlbear]

Probably later this (Monday) evening or early tomorrow.

[mdlbear]

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